What do you think of this short poem?
Above
Birds empty their hymn,
upon lonely space
Singing into drums-the bipolar sky
Hidden among limbs-towering high
If only, I could gather wings
Pull into sun’s gravity
Moments of brevity-pain erased
Burned upon its amber face
Copyright DragonLady 2008
The bi-polar sky part? Just that the sky is both sunny, yet cold--not making up its mind
I disagree with the person above me, I think the flow is nice. I love the two opening lines ;Birds empty their hymn,; upon lonely space;